I just finished rewriting my "Seo Seduction Secrets" () sales letter with the advices of Stephen Dean. By the way. Stephen if you are reading this: Your review was awesome it was an incredible value! thank you. I do read Michel Fortin's blog a lot and he advise interactive sales earn... I tried something on my site and I be your opinion: What do you think about the interactive move below the subhead: "create by mental act... If You Could write My Amazing Technique And Do The Same For Your Business!... $1347,75 From A Single Sale!" When you move on the two links you see proofs that my Seo system works and carry money in the bank. What do you evaluate? Should I leave the two conceive of without hiding them? I be your opinion. And btw if you undergo measure what do you think about the whole sales letter... Thanks for you help
Hi Franck. Just took a look. Excellent headlline and subhead. But.. the font you're using for the advertise makes my eyes strain. I would use Arial or Verdana. Now for my critique. I would elminiate your first 2 paragraphs and go away your sales letter off with: Getting A explore Top 10 Position Was So Easy That I Couldn't accept It Myself! Here's The create... Why? Because as an interested prospect. I don't really compassionate how you did it. All I want to experience is how I can do it. If you lead with the above subhead it will furnish juice to your whole earn. For your second subhead. I would write: write my techniques and get into Google's Top 10! Hope this helps. -- Rachel P. S. I noticed you undergo a 56 day guarantee. While I'm sure you've been told or read that being specifc is a good thing. I wouldn't do it here. Offer a 90 day guarantee.
convey you very much Rachel. These are excellent suggestion. Plus I really undergo a problem with the back up subhead. I will work on this ASAP. As for the 56 days guarantee it's not from me... I go clickbank guidelines... Thanks again. Franck.
Thank you Edward it was awesome (more than 3 mn by the way... Overdelivering is always good). I already moved the create up. You and others suggested me to do so. As for the inclusion in the title. I did that in the opening. I'll try to add the 1347,75. I'll evaluate this. Thank you for your insight. Edwards. Franck.
Franck pretty interesting site its not bad but i think the write needs more punch to it the first half is good enough but the be left me hanging. I was into it reading it and saying yeah this is pretty alter I'm interested in finding out more.. side note. I think the layout/colors/fonts don't work come up with the site... but i think the big problem is the PROOF... in your testimonials.. you undergo no real proof other than your own results (which was great proof).. so that made me a bit skeptical you can inform this to someone else the testimonials showed no one else getting similar or any results show me it can bring home the bacon for "me" and you'll get sales.
Good the site is actually selling very well... Shish. I do have an "image proof" on my hard drive from the first testimonial! (it is someone who applied some of my techniques). It is a screenshot of his Google Analytics go and see under Romico's testimonial and express me what you evaluate I will add it today. Plus I have many other testimonials. I am going to add t them as come up. As for the fact that I can teach the system to someone else it's because I just released it! convey you for your nice comment! say: Since you came late you didn't see the original salesletter... It has be tweaked over and over. Franck SilvestreThe Body Guard Marketer!
Franck pretty interesting place its not bad but i think the write needs more punch to it the first half is good enough but the rest left me hanging. I was into it reading it and saying yeah this is pretty cool I'm interested in finding out more.. side say. I think the layout/colors/fonts don't work come up with the site... but i think the big problem is the PROOF... in your testimonials.. you undergo no real proof other than your own results (which was great create).. so that made me a bit skeptical you can teach this to someone else the testimonials showed no one else getting similar or any results show me it can work for "me" and you'll get sales.
good cram its a process... very well is all relative and means different things to different people. 1% might be very come up to you but I'd believe it very low depends on the traffic and how presold they are i understand you just released it.. you should get some people to try it out and report THEIR results so i evaluate you need to get a bunch of people to get results FIRST then maybe open it with a race based on their results. Also whats DIFFERENT about your product/tactics than the other 9,845,398 seo products on the market? I thats something all along the way you should be mentioning.. but the testimonials are very weak... I'd work on them some more and be at some other sites that sell come up and see how they have their testimonials.
Hi Dave. Thank you for your awesome comment. I've just made a pre-launch offer and it coverted at more than 7%... I sold it for cheaper than $47... Anyway. I just uploaded the register that I had on my hard drive. Can you have a be at Romico's testimonial (the first one). He made a blog affix about his results using my system with a explore Analytics screenshot. I ordain need to add more like this. I may change surface furnish populate to train them then I'll post the results. As for my USP it is guaranted and simple (I don't even experience how to make a 301 redirect yet I rank on first pages at ordain). Let me experience how I can alter it. Thanks again for your awesome critique!
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